Thursday, May 27, 2010
Notes on Gator Boards 2.0.
I sent a link to my boards to my friend, a story guy at Blue Sky Studios. He sent an amazing letter critiquing my boards with amazing detail. Well, nothing worthwhile was ever easy. But it means a lot that he considered my boards worth critiquing.
I'll sum up his letter:
-Change the taffic light to a Walk signal
- Add panels to show acting between characters, important when the characters meet for the first time. (Also, make the poses clear - think silhouettes)
- Add more POV shots - the kid's point of view down the street to the lady, an over-the shoulder shot POV of the gator as it starts to pull. If we're not siding with the gator, avoid any shots that looks like gator POVs, like when she's being pulled.
- draftsmanship-wise, make the backgrounds look like the city and not just blank walls. (and those cars in the upshots).
- Add some Thoughtful and Appropriate camera use. Put in some moving camera shots as needed (in CG, they're just boarded in without arrows, as in TV boards)
He also says, "If you are really into a career as a board artist, I recommend the Hollywood Camerawork dvd set." Definitely something to think about.
Now, what I will do: ---
Nix the upshots from the sidewalk
POV of the kid seeing the lady.
Have some Down shots so we see the gator pulling them in.
Have a profilish angle of the kid moving forwards around her for the grab
a POV over the shoulder of the gator.
and ... some camera moves. i have to think about that.